Fog Eyes, an Elegiac Poem

Earth it spins, round and round, keeping me, away you, from this world, you fly
Angels wings, unseen wind, lifted you, beyond me, earth behind, goodbye

Creeping through, breaking through, sitting here, wanting not, wish you’d go, fog eyes
Desperate, despondent, lifeless night, stars removed, lonely space, sad sky
Begging you, show me now, beyond life, where you live, past the sun, gods home
Vale of fog, heavy mist, melt away frozen grief, I’m alive, alone

Possibly the hardest challenge I’ve ever attempted. Thank you to the Daily Post for the Fog prompt and style.

https://dailypost.wordpress.com/dp_assignment/writing-201-fog/

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elegiac_couplet

20 comments on “Fog Eyes, an Elegiac Poem”

Beautifully and movingly written . . .Thank you, Heather

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Thank you, Peter. Took me the entire day. I appreciate this wholeheartedly!!!!!!

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Sometimes the fog can be a safe hiding place . When the fog clears reality returns. Beautiful poem, Heather.

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Heather's Starting End on March 3, 2015 at 9:34 pm said:

Thank you so very much, Anne

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Wonderfull and painfull at the same time. Truly an adventure through life. :-). Maybe an awakening. Spurs plenty of thoughts.

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Heather's Starting End on February 22, 2015 at 10:53 pm said:

Kind thanks for reading , Dennis 🙂

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Stunning 😉

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Heather's Starting End on February 22, 2015 at 10:52 pm said:

Hey, thanks Morgan ❤

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a hard prompt indeed! I think you did fabulously…especially for a first time in this genre!

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Heather's Starting End on February 22, 2015 at 10:51 pm said:

Thanks, Bryan! I screwed up the 2nd meters and kept it at 3 the whole way through but I’ll never tell 😉 😀

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Elegiac poetry is a style I was unaware of….after reading up on it…I think your poem is a masterpiece! 🙂

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Heather's Starting End on February 23, 2015 at 8:56 am said:

A very gracious compliment!! There are variations and I’m still not sure if I am in correct meter form. I was so tired after trying to fo it that there was no way I could break down the rules again to see 🙂 I a. Very grateful for feelings on this, Mis. Hugs, H

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You select the most enthralling images for all of your posts, it’s almost like walking through the very mists you describe.
a.g.

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This is amazing. Moving. Wonderful. ❤

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Heather's Starting End on March 31, 2015 at 8:38 pm said:

Thank you!!!! It was a first and hard attempt at this style. Hardest one to date lol! I am SO glad you liked it 🙂 makes the challenge very worth it ❤ !!!!

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- prospermind on March 31, 2015 at 8:44 pm said:
  
  Sometimes jumping into cold waters pays off. I love(d) it, really!! You’ve succeeded. 😉
  
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- Heather's Starting End on March 31, 2015 at 8:46 pm said:
  
  It took me a couple of hours just to read all over to try and figure out really what it wanted It was a good way to spend a Sunday. Best is when the cold water suddenly turns warm when you start to “get” it 🙂 SOOOO nice of you 🙂
  
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- prospermind on March 31, 2015 at 9:04 pm said:
  
  I agree. It’s a great feeling when you finish a piece you’ve worked on for a while, especially if it’s something you’ve never done before. I have so many unfinished pieces sitting here and there.. I don’t even dare to count. 😀
  
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- Heather's Starting End on March 31, 2015 at 9:29 pm said:
  
  😉 They all will have their time and their place 🙂
  
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- prospermind on March 31, 2015 at 9:34 pm said:
  
  Maybe not all, but a few. 😀
  
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